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1️⃣❌the teenage is the happiest period of the lives of them✅the teenage years is the happiest period of life for them
2️⃣❌these years they are at the best physical health situation, generally.✅during these years they usually enjoy the best state of physical health.
3️⃣ keeping fitness✅ keeping fit
4️⃣❌they can make a lot friends✅
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5️⃣❌make a great happiness✅
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6️⃣❌ teenagers are less stressful. ✅ teenagers experience less stressful.
7️⃣❌their duties are restricted✅they have only few responsiblities.
8️⃣❌ this causes they ✅ as a result of this
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9️⃣❌they seen remarkably calm and happy.✅they usually look/seem calm and happy.
🔟❌adulthood is happier age ✅adulthood is a happier time
1️⃣1️⃣❌people have the job ✅people usually have a full-time job
1️⃣2️⃣❌and because of working feel they are beneficially important for the society.✅and because of this they feel that they are beneficial and important for the society.
1️⃣3️⃣❌as the adults have to work routinely✅as adults have a full-time job with a fixed working hours
1️⃣4️⃣⁉️makes a great pleasure to them.
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1️⃣5️⃣❌ employees have to be early bird and this makes them to seem ✅ employees have to get up early everyday and this makes them seem...
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1️⃣6️⃣❌make their own decisions self-confidently✅make their own decisions without other people's approval