" The fire I lit was extinguished and the room was completely dark. As i stepped into the room, i saw to red dots blinking in the corner of room"

Can anyone review this sentence and tell me if this is correct or it can be modified??

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If room was completely dark, then how I saw anything?
Pra.3
I'm assuming the fire has been lit somewhere outside the room and it was the source for lighting that room. It yes, then I would say:

The fire I lit had extinguished and the room has gone completely dark. But as I stepped inside the room, I saw two red dots blinking in a corner.

Alternatively, if the fire was inside the room

The fire I lit in the room had extinguished and it has gone completely dark. But as I stepped inside, I saw two red dots blinking in a corner.
"The fire I had lit was completely extinguished and the room was now completely dark." The action of lighting a fire came before it was extinguished.
David Ped Edema
The sentence is grammatically correct, but it can be modified for clarity. A possible modification is: "As I stepped into the room, which was completely dark as the fire I had lit had been extinguished, I noticed two red dots blinking in the corner of the room."
"The fire I lit, was subsumed by the darkness, as I went int th room, I saw the two res dots gleaming in th corner"
Bhalerao A
When I entered the room ,
, I found it engulfed in darkness . The fire that was lit; now extinguished . Despite the pervasive darkness , I
noticed two red dots blinking in the corner of the room .
The fire I had lit was extinguished leaving the room in a complete darkness. Stepping inside, I saw a gleam of red dots blinking at the corner of the room.

This sounds more wattpadish.
Amit Giri
The sentence is grammatically correct. however i have suggestion to write the same as:


"As I stepped into the dark room, the fire I lit had been extinguished, leaving the room completely devoid of light. However, my eyes caught two red dots blinking in the corner, emanating from a small device on the floor."
ؑؑ/\ؑؑ𝕃ؑؑ𝕋ؑؑ𝔸ؑؑ𝔽ؑؑ
In a completely darkened room, The fire i lit was extinguished. as i step in blinking red spots were seen in the corner of the room.
ؑؑ/\ؑؑ𝕃ؑؑ𝕋ؑؑ𝔸ؑؑ𝔽ؑؑ
Satyu
If room was completely dark, then how I saw anything?
because you were blind
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